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16 words? hah! (16 Jan 2006 at 18:35)

Limiting oneself to 16 words? ha! Take this, William Carlos Williams; haiku is the one true minimalist poetry form factor:

i have a wagon
it is red and has some wheels
in fact four of them

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.16.06 19:59:41

I mean:

i have the pacman
it can say waka-waka
in fact four of they

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Max (pcp0010478666pcs.hamden01.ct.comcast.net) – 01.16.06 20:57:57

the monsters turn blue
and flee instead of pursue
dang power capsules

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.16.06 22:56:53

"in fact four of they"?
Why the nominative case?
I would prefer "them"

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-246.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.17.06 00:29:48

sridhar: yes, of course; it is a reference to the quote from my previous post.

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nothings (adsl-71-141-248-216.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net) – 01.17.06 01:36:12

Laser shots descend
Like springtime cherry blossoms--
Nevermind, wrong game

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FARINA00 (host226-98.pool8536.interbusiness.it) – 01.17.06 10:58:58

Where am I, I thought
this was a blog or something!
Retrogame poetry?

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-246.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.17.06 11:06:02

It started like a
haiku, but ended with one
too many syllables

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superman's cousin (cmu-79779.wv.cc.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 11:11:40

poor Mr. Williams. If only he knew.

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Max (pcp0010478666pcs.hamden01.ct.comcast.net) – 01.17.06 11:46:32

What do you expect?
He's only Italian;
he can't count syllables

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-246.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.17.06 11:50:02

oh my goodness
this is not even close to being a haiku
but it is shaped like one

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 12:15:57

Oh, how obvious
How could I not have seen it?
Such huge text below

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FARINA00 (host226-98.pool8536.interbusiness.it) – 01.17.06 12:19:08

[is syllabation different from language to language? shit I couldn't find a way to fit this is in 5-7-5 ;) ]

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 13:38:38

farina: would you pronounce "italian" with 4 syllables? It's definitely 3 for us. I took that as the joke in Max's haiku.

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Max (pcp0010478666pcs.hamden01.ct.comcast.net) – 01.17.06 13:40:44

Come on, Farina,
you've never heard of dipthongs?
"Poetry" has one.

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MM (112.126.78.83.cust.bluewin.ch) – 01.17.06 18:15:13

Are you ok, Tom, and Max?

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 19:11:02

mm: yes, of course! =) Do we sound not ok? ;)

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Adhesion (adhesion.rh.rit.edu) – 01.17.06 19:11:34

there is no okay
there is only the cheesecake
it is delicious

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jcreed (wittgenstein.wv.cc.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 19:20:50

laser containment
womb keeps escapist so safe
cheesecake beyond exit

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 19:51:49

well it's supposed to
be laser "suspension" womb
'cuz you must come out

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Max (pcp0010478666pcs.hamden01.ct.comcast.net) – 01.17.06 19:53:22

Yes I'm okay, MM.
Wait, is "MM" one syllable?
I sure hope it is.

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.17.06 19:53:59

do scare quotes count as
syllables or what because
i don't wanna fail

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 00:14:21

I ate the cheesecake
you were saving for breakfast.
Sorry. It was good.

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FARINA00 (host226-98.pool8536.interbusiness.it) – 01.18.06 04:37:14

Dipthongs are my bread,
pronunciation fucks me up.
And it's not pleasant.

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 09:47:43

is that a reference
sridhar to an M.I.T.
404 not found?

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 12:46:57

No, to a poem
of William Carlos Williams
The one about plums

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Cortney (chiggins.ce.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 13:13:41

Genius.
<a href="http://www.favoritepoem.org/poems/williams/">This is Just to Say</a>

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 13:33:25

The MIT one is gone now, but it was,
"I ate your Web page.
Forgive me. It was juicy
And tart on my tongue."

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 13:33:58

talking in haiku
makes me feel like ten times more
sophisticated

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FARINA00 (host226-98.pool8536.interbusiness.it) – 01.18.06 13:51:23

reading in haiku
- trust me, oh old time e-friend -
burns my eyes and brain

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Beef (resnetplp1.seattleu.edu) – 01.18.06 15:19:34

One haiku post spawns
multitude. Use quickly for
a Zergling attack!

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 15:29:01

was playing starcraft
and then it was like "zerg rush"
kekeke gg

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Cortney (chiggins.ce.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 15:36:05

how do you say that last part?

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jcreed (wittgenstein.wv.cc.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 16:17:56

I think it's something like "kay kay kay gee gee" or maybe "kee kee kee gee gee"

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Tom 7 (gs82.sp.cs.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 16:25:22

Yeah, I always read it as kee kee kee. It's how Koreans laugh on the internet. They love their Starcraft!

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.18.06 17:26:30

The age of haikus has expired
For me, anyway, 'cause I'm tired
of forms that are lacking
what this new one's packing
Henceforth, I say, rhyming's required

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jcreed (pool-70-17-184-8.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 01.20.06 00:49:19

In limericks now are we s'posed
To shoehorn in all our prose?
Of rhyme forms this one
Is, I guess, pretty fun
though not quite a cinch to compose.

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jcreed (pool-70-17-184-8.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 01.20.06 01:18:56

LOL OMFG
IMHO <3
TTFN
ML FTW!
STFU NUB GG

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jcreed (pool-70-17-184-8.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 01.20.06 01:25:28

Oh, whoops, I rhymed "G" with "G". How clumsy! The first line ought to be something like "ROFL BRB" instead.

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.20.06 02:03:18

Is there a term for "!" that rhymes with "enn"? (Or, perhaps, is there a term for "N" that rhymes with "bang"?)

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Arthur (ctwboo101.ctw.utwente.nl) – 01.20.06 07:01:47

Sridhar> in Dutch "!" is "uitroepteken". Would that help?

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jcreed (pool-141-151-145-95.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 01.20.06 10:32:47

The expansion "for the win" is at least my preferred pronuncation of "FTW" rather than "eff tee double-you". Try to do it in a southern pen-pen merger accent and it rhymes with N.

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jcreed (pool-141-151-145-95.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 01.20.06 10:34:36

whoops, *pin*-pen merger

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Sridhar (cmu-155125.res.cmu.edu) – 01.20.06 12:18:00

Your merger is so strong you can't even differentiate when typing!

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MM (44.159.62.81.cust.bluewin.ch) – 01.23.06 21:12:54

MM is not getting it... Kirima has no idea. But I'm a poet:

If only
you could
get the things come together
you might learn to be an
expert of the rhythm

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MM (44.159.62.81.cust.bluewin.ch) – 01.23.06 21:30:40

I guess I've got it. Somehow.

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MM (21.150.76.83.cust.bluewin.ch) – 01.27.06 18:43:38

If only anyone would try to answer...

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-226.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.27.06 20:00:02

mm: They don't teach you about haikus and limericks in Heidiland?

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MM (17.240.186.195.cust.bluewin.ch) – 01.29.06 19:23:39

No!

But I know a lot about iambus, trochaeus or hexameter.

They don't teach you about those in Bushland?

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-226.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.30.06 21:29:33

Oof, calling it Bushland is a "below the belt" blow. ;)

Haiku is really simple; there are three lines, each with a syllable count: 5-7-5. (Comes from the Japanese.)

Limerick is a little bit more complex, but well explained in the Wikipedia article: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Limerick_(poetry)

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-226.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 01.30.06 21:29:43

PS. These are both pretty stupid forms of poetry. ;)

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MM (75.114.79.83.cust.bluewin.ch) – 02.03.06 17:34:10

Heidiland is...

Below the belt as well

Bushland

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Tom 7 (h-68-166-177-226.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 02.03.06 19:30:34

Awww sorry! I didn't mean to offend--I actually don't know what it means. But you used it the first time you e-mailed me, so I thought it was just a cutesy name. =)

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MM (19.145.203.62.cust.bluewin.ch) – 02.05.06 18:56:19

Heidiland is as bad as Bushland, or even worse...

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Kirima (249.147.77.83.cust.bluewin.ch) – 02.10.06 20:45:38

Heidi's Bushland,
or even worse:
Bush's Heidiland...

Better:

Escapist's tom7derful Kirimaland

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Tom 7 (h-72-244-70-225.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 02.10.06 23:33:50

Be thankful that Bush only has one land!

The only problem with Escapeland is all those lasers... but at least you have all the time in the world to think. =)

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jcreed (pool-70-20-114-145.pitt.east.verizon.net) – 02.11.06 00:19:29

I vote for The Escapist for president of Escapeland! With Hugbot as vice-president. For surely if the Escapist meets an untimely end, Hugbot will gravitate towards his ashes, and faithfully follow his path in all policy decisions, bestowing crushing love on all citizens of the realm.

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Tom 7 (h-72-244-70-225.phlapafg.dynamic.covad.net) – 02.11.06 07:30:01

Time stops forever when escapist becomes ash. One can only undo.

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